Book 2: Part 2

I have started on Book 2, I’m about 6,000 words in.  I’ve written four chapters, any of which could probably be the first chapter, but I have one in particular of which I am fond.  The character I’ve created to oppose Sarah Dayson in book 2 will be vile, a user, and a sociopath.

I submitted the chapter with the antagonist as my second submission to the Zebulon writing contest. It’s probably not nearly as well edited as the first entry, but hey, I’m running out of time.

The bad man’s name is Garrette Orson. I can’t tell you much more about him, because I don’t want to give too much away as spoilers.  But he is a vile person. Writing him is both completely creepy and a bit invigorating as a test of what nastiness I’m capable of thinking up.  Orson is going to be much more horrible as a human being than Merik (from book 1) ever was.

Orson is completely disrespectful of women, something rare in his society. Since his fleet is no longer in Alliance space, however, he sees an opportunity to change the rules to what he likes them to be.

Here is an excerpt:


“Those look like toys,” Commander Heinrich, the Schein’s XO said, laughing. “What are you going to do, play us to death?” She started unstrapping her acceleration webbing, a step Captain Lorre followed.
Orson pointed his weapon at Heinrich’s leg and pulled the trigger. A loud popping sound slammed into Orson’s ears, momentarily stunning him.

Blood flowed from the Commander’s leg, coagulating in deep red spheres which floated on the air currents. She slumped in her webbing as she screamed, “You son of a bitch!”

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